Category: Writers Block
It's the first frost of the year and there you lie
sleeping soundly
peaceful like a child
It's night's like these I remember
why I fell in love.
Something about how we fit together keeping each other warm
and how I'd gladly spend eternity hand in hand,holding you close.
It's truly beautiful how our kisses are shrouded in vapour
How we can see our words and how they linger in the air.
As if to hold their meaning forever while we tighten our grip.
The world is plunged into ice and snoww but like a widow covering her flower, we protect each other from thwe howling winds and offer shelter from the cold.
That's why on this coldest night
I fear no chill
I hate no wind
For while my body may shiver
and my fingers grow numb
My trembling lips will always find yours
and will never speak another name.
This is good. To me, it speaks of a very deep and amazing love.
It's not bad.
You could be right though I see the lovers as two vampires, because they wouldn't need to worry about exposure to the cold.
this is a very deep, chilling, yet warm poem at the same time.
Thank you it was inspired by the weather here it's perishing
A very deep and inspiring poem, I agree, but what happened to the rime/rhyme; as per subject????
Rime. spelled r.i.m.e is type of frost, it's a fitting title don't you think .
Wow Goblin. You're awesome.
Cheers
It has been said once or twice..smile
Now that you've explained the title it makes more sense.
I like it. The vampire image is good, dark to correspond with the night and the weather.
Thanks for posting it.
Bob
Hmm I thought you didn't like dark but thank you
Well, you need more punctuation and if everything seems odd, use a comma.
Good over all.